tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6581277174023785317.post4270345792194130218..comments2024-03-28T07:20:26.335-04:00Comments on Carol Baldwin's Blog: A Stab at Internalization: Lillie's POVCarol Baldwinhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10444182118975929045noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6581277174023785317.post-39356144489755800762014-09-18T08:14:51.986-04:002014-09-18T08:14:51.986-04:00Thanks, Joyce. Now you see why I need to start ove...Thanks, Joyce. Now you see why I need to start over!Carol Baldwinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10444182118975929045noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6581277174023785317.post-80743774086229330702014-09-17T21:57:06.559-04:002014-09-17T21:57:06.559-04:00BRAVO! The science in her - it gushes forth in he...BRAVO! The science in her - it gushes forth in her indignation. So much richer!<br /><br />This next draft is going to be so amazing!Joyce Moyer Hostetterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05153114928220349251noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6581277174023785317.post-28020219572212084792014-09-17T18:51:39.989-04:002014-09-17T18:51:39.989-04:00Thanks, Kathy. I wasn't sure about that anger ...Thanks, Kathy. I wasn't sure about that anger swelling part. WIll I see you at the conference? Hope so!Carol Baldwinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10444182118975929045noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6581277174023785317.post-26993742403138531162014-09-17T17:08:59.365-04:002014-09-17T17:08:59.365-04:00Carol, I could definitely see the difference. I r...Carol, I could definitely see the difference. I really like how you describe her anger swelling and then adding her scientific descriptions of how she sees things. Thank you for sharing this!Kathleenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05679449648431237189noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6581277174023785317.post-56835663503921419362014-09-16T17:27:24.646-04:002014-09-16T17:27:24.646-04:00Thanks Sheri. Now I'm trying to figure out how...Thanks Sheri. Now I'm trying to figure out how to bring it into chapter 1! Stay tuned...Carol Baldwinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10444182118975929045noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6581277174023785317.post-8653329025044021112014-09-16T17:14:59.282-04:002014-09-16T17:14:59.282-04:00This was a wonderful revision. I love the idea of ...This was a wonderful revision. I love the idea of adding her reaction to the settings and items and I wanted to read more. and definitely the analogy of having to change. A perfect way to weave this in your story!!Can't wait for your book to be completed!! You go girl!! Awesome...sheri levyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08044105588939751015noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6581277174023785317.post-56642228137606483522014-09-16T07:32:11.451-04:002014-09-16T07:32:11.451-04:00Thanks friends, for being my advanced readers!Thanks friends, for being my advanced readers!Carol Baldwinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10444182118975929045noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6581277174023785317.post-23248594593078068702014-09-15T23:09:43.330-04:002014-09-15T23:09:43.330-04:00Wow. It is so much richer. I feel like I really kn...Wow. It is so much richer. I feel like I really know the narrator, but I didn't feel that way at all on the first draft. Congratulations.Rosihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01294774973863802821noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6581277174023785317.post-70620195443352064902014-09-15T22:42:05.699-04:002014-09-15T22:42:05.699-04:00I like that analogy of the young lovers having to ...I like that analogy of the young lovers having to change so they could stay together. You'll be using that in more ways than one throughout the book!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6581277174023785317.post-91157490880211176122014-09-15T22:10:40.486-04:002014-09-15T22:10:40.486-04:00"Everyone knows that when you put two atoms o... "Everyone knows that when you put two atoms of hydrogen and one atom of oxygen together, you get water. Never ammonia or salt or zinc. You can boil it and change it into steam, or freeze it into an ice cube, but it’s still water."<br /><br />Love how you are showing the scientific way Lillie thinks. Keep on with it!<br /><br />Linda Phillipshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10838197966070322540noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6581277174023785317.post-37552245916491185062014-09-15T20:47:38.993-04:002014-09-15T20:47:38.993-04:00Thanks, Linda. Glad it pulled you in and left you ...Thanks, Linda. Glad it pulled you in and left you wanting more. You are kind to write and tell me.Carol Baldwinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10444182118975929045noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6581277174023785317.post-57769169992862314352014-09-15T20:42:20.961-04:002014-09-15T20:42:20.961-04:00Bravo, Carol! I find lots of science references a...Bravo, Carol! I find lots of science references and reactions to physical descriptions, like the teacup and water in the setting. Lillie compares events in her life with the tale of the characters that inspired the teacup story. This pulled me in and made me want more! Linda A.https://www.blogger.com/profile/16517546647672781332noreply@blogger.com